Headline:
Wright Brothers' Flying Attempt Successful
Byline:
By Zachary Waters
Lead Paragraph:
Known brother inventors Wilbur and Orville Wright were successful in their first flying machine experiments. On December 17, 1903, the brothers' years of testing and guessing were finally put to the test at Kill Devil Hills, just four miles south of Kitty Hawk, N.C.
Explanation:
The first flight was made by Orville at 10:35 a.m. of 120 feet in 12 seconds.The next two flights went 175 feet and 200 feet, made by Wilbur and Orville respectively. Witnesses (there were 5) were amazed by what they were witnessing, but none were available for comment. Orville was able to comment on how one of the rudders was badly damaged at the end of the day, but "could be put in condition for flight again in about a day or two." And what did these brave men do at the end of their demonstration? They went into town to send a telegram to their father of their successful flights.
Zach,
ReplyDeleteOff to a strong start. As you continue to build on the inverted pyramid, focus on clarifying the lead paragraph. The lead paragraph is a bit vague (i.e., , in terms of what happened, where, when, why, how). The reader needs to continue on to get an idea of what occurred. Rather, tell them upfront in a way that encourages them to keep on reading. Keep it up!